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Under the microscope

Author and lecturer James McCreet puts a reader’s first 300 words through a forensic micro-critique

DEATH OF A CORNISH INNOCENT

His hands were used to different work.1 This was surprisingly straightforward.2 Firm pressure. Gradually increasing.3 Though slightly built, she managed to find strength to resist.4 Momentarily.5 A desperate pointless thrashing around.6 She succumbed disappointingly easily.7 It was a task well done.8 A popping sensation at the base of his flexed fingers.9 Then she was limp. Peaceful.10 There was a beauty about her now that was absent in life.11 No one would miss her.12 A poor broken thing.13 Broken in a different way from him.14 She would have spoiled everything.15

Duncan drove over the brow of Pentargan Hill and descended down16 the meandering beach road,17 the city of tents and caravans stretching out beneath him in an untidy sprawl.18 A few wispy clouds hung in an otherwise vivid blue sky.19 The sun was warm, the breeze light, ruffling his brown hair.20 He was overdue a haircut.21 A solitary magpie flew across the bonnet of his open topped sports car.22 He instinctively ducked as the black and white bird23 narrowly missed the windscreen.

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